I’ve decided to split Chapter 1 into two chapters (at least for now) and rewrite the second half. I wasn’t happy with the level of detail and the emphasis on a particular aspect of the story and lack of detail on another, equally important one. The writing is also currently inconsistent with the rest of the book, so some rewriting is necessary.
Now, what to keep, what to cut, and what to add? I’ve got a few ideas. Hope to have the new draft by Monday. We’ll see…