Upon review, it seems there are two issues with the Pierrepont section. Parts of it need to be resequenced and/or split off on their own, and some stuff needs to be focused on more closely.
Part of the problem is that my reaction to certain events is atypical, at least as I’ve been told. I’ve had one reader ask me about a certain person that seemed to be important but then vanished. “Surely she’d remain in your thoughts.” I had to think about that because she was right – the person was important and yet, once she disappears from sight I don’t ever mention her again. I’m having that same issue now much later on only with more people. Weird. Oh well…